[Famous Masters Review Poems] Su Jun commented on Yingyou and "Yongyue"

【Poetry Decoding】

Su Jun Reviews Agency Friends and Yongyue

Shigouzhai Original Singing

Chanting moon

The moon fell into the glass, and Yu Guang was still half a floor.

The most suspected hook, fishing on both sides.

The jade ax was out of mind, and Fang Zhu's tears did not accept it.

I don't know who to make up the mirror, and hang the east of the sea.

01

Jian Zhai (two songs)

one

The lone moon opened the sky mirror, and the micro -cloud scattered sea building.

Come to a pot of wine, as appropriate for a century.

It is difficult to look at the distance, and the tears will not be collected.

Who has immortal art, and the head of the garden is long.

two

The bath water pearl is now full of acacia.

Zun Kai's parting hate, tears in ancient and modern sorrows.

The iron flute wind was interrupted, and the gold wave threshold was collected.

Where is Liuyin, Zai Yue is the head.

Comment::

Overall, it is better than the other. Covering emotions is full. The second is close, and the neck is also separated. The end of the sentence is too abrupt, and it is also owed.

02

Close

The jade bait sinks the crescent moon, and Silun goes off the fishing building.

Do not hook the pool song carp, which is sorrowful in the world.

Sea -yabu is still the police, and soldiers are not easy to accept.

Su'e should have hate, tears rising.

Comment::

The first four are too much, it is not as good as the subsequent four.

03

Seasonal college

Everyone is in love with the moon, how can you follow the tower.

Ji Ming was shocked, and the goose was moving nostalgic.

The water intestines should be broken, and the glue nose will not be collected.

Sadness and happiness are infinite, how do you want to say.

Comment::

The first six sentences are rotating in situ without layered. The end of the sentence is not common.

04

Lin Zhongxian

The blue sea flow turns, and the floating light is into the corner building.

Yao Qian Qian Muyue, still taking care of last year.

The epidemic eventually disappeared, and Zhengyun had not been collected for a long time.

The ice wheel is missing, what is the heart.

Comment::

The inheritance is equal. There is only a cloud of Yunyu, and the conclusion "What" is contradictory with the clouds of necks.

05

Azi

The stars are wide tonight, and the light enters the small building.

Do not pass on the world's joy, which makes the world sorrow.

Hate me, I will be old, and Si Jun does not accept it.

Holding a cup to look at the jade mirror, the past.

Comment::

Emotional is still cut, and he has not arrested. For example, the world, the world's palms, and the shallow conclusions, etc., are not exercising without adding it.

06

Yanyu Tower

In the clouds of Yuyu, the two sides of the strait are shining.

Poor and sorrow, too sad.

People are bitter, who will accept the sword halberd?

In the passionate sky, still shining the cannon head.

Comment::

It is described by the Strait in the Month of the Month.

07

Xiaoyue

The two places are generally moon, and the autumn light is sealed.

Don't hate it clearly, and want to worry about worrying.

The Yutu medicine is frequent, and the tears do not receive.

It was also shocked like rain, and tide.

Comment::

There are also many things with emotions, and love is still called. The only jade rabbit sentence is lonely, and the knot is too exposed.

08

Xiangzi

The autumn wind blows the Gui Temple, Feilu wet the building.

Suspected to store tears in the mountains, but still sorrow now.

Suxin has not changed, and Qi Qi has been closed.

Mingyue should know me, come and take care of the white head.

Comment::

There are also many emotions, but the qi is not paid, and the knot is light.

09

Guiyun

Jade mirror hangs Yunhan, Guanghua immersed Bishou.

One round of wonderful phenomena, leaving the sorrow in all night.

Brightness is clear, cool and free.

Last month, a few people were urged.

Comment::

The intention and structure are suspected. The neck is particularly good.

10

Pingzhai

The ice wheel tonight is full, and the silver light is full of the building.

You Yun was hateful, and Jade Rabbit was always worried.

Relying on the threshold is difficult, and the stop is not closed.

The most affectionate, long -hanging wild hills.

Comment::

Although there is no big flaw, it is straightforward and vulgar.

11

Jiashan

The rain is clear, and the Yun Kaiyu mirror is born.

Bai Shuangli is over, Yinlian is in the river.

For the sorrows of the month, you think about it.

Chang Yin went home to Fu, still Liu Yingming.

Comment::

The neck was lost, and the tail sentence was lost.

12

Chen Xiuge

The birds cried in the mountains, and the moon went upstairs.

Ying Ying's self -appreciation, cold and cold.

Back to the dream, the departure was not harvested.

Last night, Lu Yan asked, came to follow Xueying's head.

Comment::

The first four are smooth. Lianlianjue. The end of the end is not deep.

13

Chen Piaoli

There are few flying jade mirrors, the candle is leaning on the south building.

Cold color can be calm, and clear heart does not store sorrow.

Qiankun thousands of miles, this ancient round was collected.

The man is lonely, clearing all over the mountain.

Comment::

The neck is good, and there is a meteorological. The rest of the people did not let go, such as the eighteen daughter's newly came out of the cabinet, which was too tight.

14

Yao Guiyu

Guiyue Liu Yinpu, Mingguang Zhaoshui Tower.

Tuan Luan hated the guests, and washed and sorrowful.

Vientiane is quiet, and the dust is clear.

Non -intentioned it every year.

Comment::

The sentence is good.联 Joint palm, neckline is not worked against work. Although the cloud is "far away", it is actually close.

15

You Yingna

See the ice wheel, and the acacia lean on the building alone.

The deep courtyard of the flowers was quiet, and the old pavilion was sorrowful.

Farewell is difficult, and no tears are accepted.

Poor tonight, look at a little bit.

Comment::

Overall, the intention is slightly flat. Sentence is natural. The sound of flowers and flowing water on the building has the rules. The neckline is from Jing to love, and it is also seen. The end responds to the theme, and the white head is connected with the sorrow of the fourth sentence, so it feels muddy. It is only used to see it, not very superb.

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Su Jun, from Gaozhou, Guangdong. The Director of the Review Department of the Institute of Cultural Research and New News Agency Art Tutor. There are many books.

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