Write your own language

Zhang Yaling, a teacher of Chengguan Middle School in Heyang County

I once asked the students: I used to use idioms and words as little as possible in the composition (I have always felt that idioms and words are "dead") or metaphors of old tooth loss (those metaphors must be tossed by everyone to be unbearable). Because they did not want to see them rack their brains to climb the good words, good sentences, good paragraphs to decorate the false moaning composition.

A very naughty child immediately said that he could say a new feeling from the old metaphor, and casually said: "My mother was angry, and she immediately became a mother tiger who was hungry for many days. , I swallowed me at any time with the blood basin. "Yes, this" mother tiger "is quite scary.

A guy jumped up without convinced, he could also open his mouth: "The sister's face is like a red apple that can smell sweetness, no matter how much the accident she breaks the previous second, you will be in the next second. I can't help but want to make a bite in the past. "This" red apple "comes with seductive expression, which is also unique.

Since my request is denied by the students, I have to modify it and re -require:

With your true feelings, taking the true life, the true life in your eyes, the true ideas in your heart. Even if the old bottle is filled with new wine, as long as it is specific, image, and new.

In this way, the students have let go of their hands and feet. The language is very distinctive and cannot see the traces of imitation. The shadow of others is the original first.

As long as it is true and sincere, each child may be amazing.

I still remember a paragraph of a child who had just entered the first year ago to remember the first -year child:

Afraid of the Olympic Mystery: The itinerary is very helpless, so that my scalp is numb, can I not chase or not? Do you not die in the same direction? The cow is blurred, making my face purple. Sorry, can I not eat it? Can you eat it and eat it well? Can you eat it and not to make trouble ... hold a pen tightly, stare at the topic with a pair of eyes, and seems to see the paper through the paper. The palms were sweaty, and the glasses slipped down and had no time to control. The question was still in the gold soup, and there was no progress.

"The winter vacation will be tired of my baby, and I will not report to the counseling class after school!" At the end of the sixth grade winter vacation, my mother looked at me with a madness to make up for the winter vacation assignment because of the tutoring class occupied too much time. Saying full of eyes. But after the start of school, I still endured the anger that almost sprayed out of my eyes, while thinking: "Just get the habit, just get used to it ..." While I stuffed the book of the tutoring class into the schoolbag, Start running.

After looking at the two paragraphs above, seriously, I was uncomfortable, I couldn't wait to hug the child immediately, and told her: It doesn't matter, because you really work hard. When the relationship is rushing, you really don't need to deliberately send words and sentences to touch the reader.

Look at the child of the second year:

Basketball ... Just the main force and active are dwarves. This is like the rooster who snapped up the eggs in front of the hen, which could only let the hen helpless.

Basketball was originally a superior movement of tall men, but the small town was a dwarf. This phenomenon was strange. The little author wrote the embarrassment and helplessness of the tall man in front of the hens with "the rooster snapped into the hens."

Wang is also the most lazy person on the court. He slowly swallowed, and he will only do the "center! Center! Pilling here", which was anxious. But think about it, the position of his standing is always the most favorable. He is like Italy during World War II, and he has never won the battle.

Xiao Wang's regret in the stadium, just like Italy in World War II, the same thing was "full advantage, but the result was funny and crying." The image also revealed the little author's ability to perceive history, making readers amazing.

Watch these five people. Xiao Wang is too self -herself, Xiao Hu does not understand tactics, I don't understand anything, and the pony and Xiao Qin will cooperate with each other. But the five people are like five fingers. The pony is the best thumb. Xiao Qin is an index finger with the thumb. Xiao Wang is the middle finger for others. I am almost useless ring finger. Xiao Hu is the most flexible little finger.

The five people introduced the five people in the form of row ratios, complete and imposing, and vividly revealed the role of five people at the court with their fingers, making readers can't help it.

This is the three stages found from the second student Liu Yang's "Things of Basketball", which has deep and image. Liu Yang is an excellent student. It is normal to write a good composition. Then take a look at the mischievous students, because the photo is true of life, and the agile sentence runs full of practice books.

It seems that only a few days later. At the second day of the first day, I looked at me, who was yawning all day yawning, and I could only look at the students who laughed all day in the first day of the first day of the first day.

Just a word, through comparison, it has completed the conversion of cognition and identity beautifully.

The optimism of the life of the third year was once half dead by a strong aroma and dignified asphyxia at the beginning of the school. Or the curriculum of the microcomputer class crazy.

How does the third grade feel? "Being ... a half dead", "Being ... completely shattered", "being crushed", "the curriculum is crazy". This momentum approaches the reader.

I made a miserable taste: when a group of people were forced to isolate joy, when I could hear the cheers of other children, I felt out of reach. When all the ideas were stranded by the unlimited system ... Who would say that the third child would say Too overwhelming? Who will ignore the pain of the third child? Who would understand the helplessness of the third child? In the third grade, only you have a deep knowledge but pretend to be deaf! This language is extremely vivid and dynamic, and the momentum is aggressive, which makes readers involuntarily fell into a deep sympathy for junior high school students. This effect is due to the integration of various rhetoric, and the row ratio, instead, contrast, and anthropomorphic have appeared.

When talking about the middle school entrance examination, it seems that all the damage has become a matter of course: in order to achieve good results, it takes granted hard work, granted it, and of course to give up everything has nothing to do with learning.

Let the "take care of it" repeatedly appeared, deepened the helplessness of the child, and enhanced the momentum in the row ratio. Excellent, stubborn, is the text in the pen, the same heart? The point is to speak your own language.

If we want to make us refreshing, every time we open the text of the child with expectations and curiosity, please remember: guide students to write in their own language, even if they are immature, even one -sided, even if they are immature, they are worth looking forward to.

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