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[Yunfan Poetry Jian] Renyin Mid -Autumn Festival Poetry Conference Evaluation

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Shengcuzi · Mid -Autumn Festival Night Bohai Bay Watch the Moon

Yixuetang

The night is as thin as a gauze, and the night is cool as snow. I and the Bai Ou League drunk the autumn festival.

Home is south of the sea, and people are north of heaven. In this eyes, I felt a shortage of my heart.

[Su Jun comment] The upper film uses the scene, the lower film is affectionate, the layers are square, and the structure is rigorous. The pavement was appropriate, the first six of the situation, the shot of the shot, the purpose of the lack of the lack, the luck, the luck and the strength were wonderful.

Mid -Autumn Festival

Bamboo forest life

The households were unbelievable, and the aroma of osmanthus is with osmanthus in the wind.

A round of white jade balls into cakes, split with all surnames in the world.

[Su Jun Comments] Also good at paving. The knot is surprising, and the speaker cannot be Jia Yong. In addition, the poets of the Shi poets often know that they are working hard at the convergence, and often ignore the pavement of the first two sentences. It should be noted that the poem is a whole, and it should not be relaxed by the word.

Water Tuning Song Head · Ren Yin Mid -Autumn Festival

Xiao Yuhan

What is the disease of the country? Whoever asked him. Nuclear acids have called countless, the third year of this year. Gui Ying hurriedly came and went around, the ground was around Hao Yu, the hot summer or cold. The face is as good as one, and the grief looks at the eyebrows.

It was haggard, from 到, to hard to sleep. Mo religiously disappointed the king's affairs, and he had to see very round. Early forgot to divide the red dust, but cherish youth is lacking. I am used to listening to parrots, people learn to talk about Juan Juan.

[Su Jun comment] This step is a big Su Yun who can take a different approach. Full of complaints, such as monthly mercury diarrhea down, seeing personality and bone.

Lang Xiaomei Comments

Ren Yin Mid -Autumn Festival

Windy

The toad palace was silent, and Guizi was silent.

From this round of month, it is divided into two places ①.

Family transmission of network cables, people are floating.

Listen to the news of autumn, Xiao Xiaofeng is full of city.

Note: ① Local epidemic prevention regulations are not necessary, "two sections" are inseparable from the city.

[Lang Xiaomei Comments] The first joint wrote "Toad Palace Light", "Month", or the image of the image, but it is not necessary to use the scripture brushwork. After reading a few winds and clear works, I think that the probability is that the wind is a subjective poet. This poem, the characteristics of the weather scene in the first seasons, the typical image "month" is in fact, and the neck is lyrical. Touching itself. Except for the first -couplet purity writing objective, the other three units are writing subjective deficiency. However, the advantage is that every time I see virtuality in the reality, the virtuality is true, the wind is comfortable, and it is very moving. However, from the perspective of the theme expression, they are happy without prostitution, sorrow without hurting, and not angry. They are in their intentions. Because it is emotional restrained, it is tension, which is different from the naked rushing. In other words, the poet's "I" tested, and the others left the reader "You" alone. This is where this poem makes me like from the first sense.

Ren Yin Mid -Autumn Festival

Safe

Suddenly the Mid -Autumn Festival, the intention of tonight is different.

Zhen Lian Qun was covered, and the epidemic was poor.

Looking at Uta's house, Chang Ge envy the ancient style.

Who cares about a round, Ren Er is shining empty.

[Lang Xiaomei Comments] Mr. Lang Mei is worried, and Mr. Wisdom has a wisdom pen. After reading this poem, the autumn wind and the wetness of the orange official Lao Du, who looked at the wet eyes of the autumn breeze, was a true feelings. Poetry takes "meaning" as the eye, the narrative of the puppet, the neck is lyrical, the tailing discusses, and the following word "meaning" is not the "meaning" of previous years. In addition to the objective of the narrative, the "home" and "ancient" are replaced, and the lyrics are also unveiled. appropriate.

Mid -Autumn Festival Suzhou Sanzu Capture

Yang Yiming

Golden Autumn Night stays in the east of Taihu Lake.

Here, Qinghui was qualified, and once Fu Xizi entered Wu Palace.

[Lang Xiaomei Comments] I think this poem can learn its excellent poetry. One said doubt. One sentence of memorizing the problem, the two sentences and the suspense, I do n’t know what “different”, and the question is increased in a question. I do n’t know why it ’s“ old and qualified here ”? Like the stream twists and turns, flowing to the end of the sentence, and the smooth water waterfall, taking advantage of the situation, all doubts. The second is seeing the shape. There are four sentences and three sentences of the quatrains. If the fourth sentence is also false, I should not like it. The fourth sentence of this poem is the finishing touch. Its shape is in "Xizi" and "Wu Gong", and the Lord is also in one "help", one, one, one, "to enter the two very active behavior verbs. Xi Zi moved to live, and his picture can be considered considerable. Those who read can be integrated into the realm. The realm of poetry is open.

Zheng Li Comments

Western Sichuan

Liu Guojun

The evil epidemic was moved by the shaft, and the fate of the fate became smoke.

Always cold Mid -Autumn Festival, also reduced Qinghui for a round.

Note: Kunxi, the ground axis imagined in the ancient mythology, this refers to the earthquake.

[Zheng Li Comment] Gui is in combination with current affairs, and it has a good intention, but the second sentence is too straightforward.

Xin Chou Mid -Autumn Festival Canglang Liuyou gathered in Loumen to enjoy the moon

Liu Qingtian

In August of Xin Chou Su, Ru Ge did not pull Loumen. He Gongyan Zhao took the horse back. The six friends came to get started, and they were on their feathers. The thin bamboo is not old. Inch -hearted, the water grinding and the cultivation of the sage. Lanling will be elegant, and the armored person returns to the gull. Shebuyun smoke on the shores of Dianshan Lake, the general was like iron. Xiao Hu Yu Shan lying on the south, there are many weather for people. But for the skeleton for spring, the double throwing of poetry and painting. How can Liu Wuqing's tea be even more required? Xiao Xie Qing had a talent, and the sea breeze blew up. With a faint eyes, I glanced at Chen Huan. The fans are out of the horse, and the spring puppet and the time are leaked. What happened to Xunyang is too late, and it is really warm without changing the lungs. Looking at each other with a smile and a cup, there is a long way to look at the eyes. Bamboo flute song, blew, good night Ming toad is not short. Piao Chao and Xie Chenzhang, the listener's plackets were frank. The strong heart was tide, and the river sprayed the water east. Yun Yueyue drove out of the ancient building. Leave the clear scenery and calmly, and the stars know the disillusionment. Tonight geometry must be happy. At this time, this scene is clear. Loumen is happy upstairs, Jiang Zuofeng is like a gallop. [Zheng Li Comments] The talent is vertical and the charm is smooth. At the end of the article, the pen is strong.

Autumn quatrack

Li Weiliang

Where is Tianya returning to the boat?

My own mountain escapes farther, and it is inevitable that it is Mid -Autumn Festival.

[Zheng Li Comments] The idea of ​​turning is very good, and it is quite infectious.

Mid -Autumn Festival message

Li Ying

The wind rose for no reason, and it was a Mid -Autumn Festival.

I still kept my mouthful for a hundred times.

Mo said that Chunlai is easy to give away, and it is difficult to find in the second.

Over the mountains of the local scriptures, Yemeng is nothing more than sky.

[Zheng Li Comments] Although the whole article is not in trouble, the Lianlian is realistic and attractive.

Mid -Autumn Festival

How the third

The light all over the ground seemed to be silver, and the wind invited me to take advantage of the good times.

If you want to pass by sideways from the small trail, the flower shadow is not allowed.

[Zheng Li Comments] Seeing ingenuity, this first uses the degree of "ingenuity" is also properly grasped.

Ren Yin Mid -Autumn Festival

Xiong Tianxi (United States)

This evening is afraid of looking at the sky, and the hometown has been led for three years.

Looking up is sad, Mo asked the silver wheel.

[Zheng Li Comments] The inheritance pavement is natural, the converter is a sudden structure, and the passage is also muddy.

Mid -Autumn Festival

Xiyinzi

The clouds and clouds are too false, and it is expected that the light is the most bright tonight.

Send me a lot of sorrows, and the dream of entering the monarch about three lives.

If there is no regret, it may not be more affectionate.

Xiao Xiaofeng started at first, listening to Su Zi asks Tian Sheng.

[Zheng Li Comments] The neck is very good, intriguing, and the tail couplet also sees Sizhi.

Hengdaozi comment

Ren Yin Mid -Autumn Festival

Bao Pu Shusheng

How annoying to go every day, the floating life is a little bit comfortable.

Hui Yin's eyes were obsessed, and it was recalled.

Being similar to wine, is it better to divide.

Yin Qing followed the Tao, why boo even more.

[Hengdaozi comment] The second couplet is like flowing water. "It was similar to wine, wouldn't it be better than dividing." The incompetent life, the meaning of pure language, is integrated. Wonderful hands. It reminds me of "helplessness, however, it seems that I have known Yan's return."

Sea moon

Zhengli

Haiyue was drunk and returned.

In the middle of the night, I woke up, every time Zhao Cangshan.

[Hengdaozi Comments] Five Jue, Four Elements Crims, not to be new, not delicate, to go out of the realm, the most "small" cannot be. Or like Li Taibai flying and lofty, not frame; or such as Wang Mo Qi quiet and deep, he is far away; or like Zheng Li's "Sea Moon", "Mid -Nirenova is lonely, every time with Cangshan", there is a kind of Han chanting. Full loneliness and desolation.

Mid -Autumn Festival

Cui Xinghua

The early night of the Xifeng courtyard, love this Qinghui together.

I drink alcohol at the poet, sitting on the shoulders side by side.

[Hengdaozi Comment] No one at first glance, do not wear boots and hats, do not make mystery, do not pretend to be in the momentum; speak people, can be daily, can be bland, and have a true taste; precious. For example, Cui Xinghua's "Mid -Autumn Festival", such as "I drink alcohol of poetry, sit side by side with a new cool."

Ban Yin Lu Dianzhan

Mid -Autumn Festival

Wang Liansheng

Eternal Jiashan Moon, looking at three places tonight.

Toad light floating in the sea, Guiying under Chang'an.

Li Jiu Xinyun was scattered, and his thoughts were cold.

Tianya was born with a lot of sense, only to explain the joy.

[Ban Yin Lu Dian] From Du Shilai, it is true. The family looked at the moon in three places, and naturally felt a lot. The knot is good. Four or six sentences see it slightly.

Mid -Autumn Festival

Wooden

The bamboo in front of the window, the clean color flowers are always Yan.

Reministenting last year, I rewarded the painting building with Jun.

[Ban Yin Lu Dian] Tanxian and light thinking, one thing, a little bit of sorrow and feelings, just right. The painting building is slightly aged.

Mid -Autumn Festival night

Deng Yuzhu

Look at the east of the building from the beginning of the autumn and the moon, and the bright and bright is the same.

I want to chant without Guizi, three more and sit on a curtain.

[Ban Yin Lu Dian] Pretty the knot, the words of nature. However, there is no Guizi three words in the sentence. If it is Yu Yue, it has been explicitly said before. If it is realistic, I can't understand why it is necessary to chant.

Mid -Autumn Festival

Zhuang Yesong

The cicada is desolate and desolate, drinking alone into three more broken intestines.

Why not see after drinking, the windows are full of cream.

[Ban Yin Lu Dian] Anti -pen. Appreciate its conclusion.

Jiang Lan Comments

Mid -Autumn Festival

Wang Liansheng

Eternal Jiashan Moon, looking at three places tonight.

Toad light floating in the sea, Guiying under Chang'an.

Li Jiu Xinyun was scattered, and his thoughts were cold.

Tianya was born with a lot of sense, only to explain the joy.

[Jiang Lan Comments] The sentence is stable and the wind is clear. Magnolia Slow · Ren Yin Mid -Autumn Festival, Chuyang Yuefu

Fang Wei

Where is the Mid -Autumn Festival, there are high platforms on the shore of Sei Water. It was me and I met, meeting each other every year, and the two olds had no guessing. Qingfang is good, yin is also acceptable, but Pengmen has already opened for the king. I look like a tail, and the monarch is promoted.

The world is everywhere, who is the old tears. The remaining corner, a small trail, a moss. If I can sit in my spare time, I will be in the cup. Micro -independent this year, I invited the Mingsian to come back!

[Jiang Lan's comment] I was talking about the ax, and the veteran of the real wheel was also.

Shengcuzi · Mid -Autumn Festival Night Bohai Bay Watch the Moon

Yixuetang

The night is as thin as a gauze, and the night is cool as snow. I and the Bai Ou League drunk the autumn festival.

Home is south of the sea, and people are north of heaven. In this eyes, I felt a shortage of my heart.

[Jiang Lan's comment] It is a bit out of breath. The last sentence of the life of the world is the same, so it can be found.

Mid -Autumn Festival

Bamboo forest life

The households were unbelievable, and the aroma of osmanthus is with osmanthus in the wind.

A round of white jade balls into cakes, split with all surnames in the world.

[Jiang Lan's comment] It is good to have ideas. Unfortunately, this moon cake is not a moon cake.

Xijiangyue · Mid -Autumn Festival

Liu Luning

The laughter entered the ear, and the night wind faintly added. Tianxin Mingyue is detailed, and still looks like childhood.

The urban neon is inevitable, and the pedestrian backs are thousands of lines. Wutong leaked all the way and guided the direction of home.

[Jiang Lan's comment] The words are close, the grid is high, and the syllables and artistic conceptions are good.

Yang Qiang's comment

Shengcuzi · Mid -Autumn Festival Night Bohai Bay Watch the Moon

Yixuetang

The night is as thin as a gauze, and the night is cool as snow. I and the Bai Ou League drunk the autumn festival.

Home is south of the sea, and people are north of heaven. In this eyes, I felt a shortage of my heart.

[Yang Xue window comment] Shangzhang wrote the joy in front of him, and the sorrow of the sorrow of the family was not strong, but the sadness was not strong, but just tap it lightly, and it was remembered that it had a taste. The subordinates are written through two layers of comparison (the south of the sea, the north of the heavens, and the circle in the eyes, and the lack of heart), which gradually enters the world.

Luohe Wangyue

Jin Rui

The dusk of Beijing is gathered, waiting for the Moon Hepu. Our generations of their birthdays, I was talking about it. Oreyue comes eastward, brilliant and Chengtianyu. Clear frost is like water, thousands of households and thousands of households. Yiyun cherishes separation, a cloud singing and dancing. Do you know sadness and joy in the month, and the accumulation is also rocky. Every night, it's a good night, and it will be a few days. The joy was short long, and I thought about it. Naijie drinking song, waved the moon. Everyone must be stubborn, what is sour and bitter.

[Yang Xue Window Review] In the middle, a period of thinking is good, and the emotions are ups and downs. Those who are a little regrettable, the title "Luohe Wangyue", the word "Wangyue" played well; the word "Luohe" only started with "waiting for the moon in the river". forget. If you can echo a little bit at the end, it may be better.

Hundred -character order

Autumn fan

Mid -Autumn Festival on the lake, playing the moon with the pot, night's drunk. Recalling the previous sentence of the twenty -six years: I am proud of my life, and I watched the Mid -Autumn Festival in the Holy Lake. Use Fan Xie to pass the tone of Qili Beach at night.

The five lakes groaned, and the autumn marks were inch into a new puppet. Breathing 300 acres of cold and light, according to my Binghuai clear. Su Ying is divided into green, Chengbo is white, and his words are clear. Flying away, the double paddles were snowing. Due to the joy of the day, the cloud blows the bamboo, Mingyue Zeng Zeng Zeng Zeng. The leftover is endless, and the dusty jade dumplings are eliminated. Call the dream song and look for the autumn people. Xiling Fenglu, who knows who will be set up next year.

Note:

① West Lake is five points, called Waigo, Lake Lake, Houhu, Yuehu, and Xiaonan Lake.

② Cao Cao's short song: Obviously like the moon, when can it be 掇.

[Yang Xue window comment] Write the scenery on the top, clearing the dust, which is far away. The ups and downs of the bottom: the word "because of the thought", turning to that year; "call the dream song", then fold back to the present; Jumping and switching, seeing both brushwork and emotion.

Autumn quatrack

Li Weiliang

Where is Tianya returning to the boat?

My own mountain escapes farther, and it is inevitable that it is Mid -Autumn Festival.

[Yang Xue window review] The last two sentences are good at flipping. "Avoiding is the Mid -Autumn Festival", it can be described as the same thing. On the surface, the "avoided" is the moon of the Mid -Autumn Festival, but in fact, it is everywhere.

Introduction to critics

Introduction to Ban Yinlu

Half -hidden Lu, real name Meng Xiangrong, Chu people live in Guangdong, university professor. He is currently serving as a poetry of Yunfan Poetry Association.

Introduction to Hengdaozi

Hengdao, his real name is Gao Yongzhi, Liaoning Changwu. He is the author of the poem collection "near life" and won the 4th Liaoning Literature Award.

Brief Introduction to Jiang Lan

Jiang Lan, male, born in 1968, from Xinyang, Henan. He graduated from the Chinese Department of Renmin University of China and worked at the National Federation of Trade Unions Teaching and Sports Trade Unions. He is currently the deputy director of the editorial department of "Poetry", deputy editor -in -chief of "China Ci Fu", and a consultant of Yunfan Poetry. He is the author of the selection of old style poems "Drinking River Collection" and "Xiang Ying Collection -Six Poetry Selection".

Introduction to Lang Xiaomei

Lang Xiaomei, female, a native of Fengcheng, Liaoning, a master's degree in literature, a lecturer at the Chinese Language and Literature Department of Liaodong College Teachers College, deputy director of the Chinese Poetry Society Review Committee, senior training class of the Education Training Center of the Chinese Poetry Society, and the poetry of the Yunfan Poetry Association. He is the author of "The Poetry of the Old Body".

Introduction to Su Jun

Su Jun, No. Shi Zhai, Cantonese.He is currently the director of the review department of the Ninth Cultural Research Institute and the mentor of the New News Agency.Poetry and poetry have won more than a thousand national awards.He has been the judge of the final trial of the National Poetry Contest.There are many books such as "Shiti Zhaibu and Gong Dingji's Miscellaneous Poems", "Stone Tu Gengzi Ci", and "Eighteen Songs of Songs".Introduction to Zheng Li

Zheng Li, born in Xingtai City, Hebei Province in 1976, is currently the president of Chengshe, the president of Xing Yishi, a member of the Hebei Writers Association, and a consultant of Xingtai Literary Critics Association.

Yang Qiang profile

Yang Qiang, Xuexue Window, born in 1987, Xiangyang, Hubei.Zhejiang Satellite TV's "Up, Poetry" champion, won the "Poetry" 2020 Chen Ziang Youth Poetry Award, the third "National Poetry Contest" Poetry Department, and the first "Sea Yue Cup" Poetry Contest Poetry Department Volume 1The third class of the finals of the word department is the judge of the poetry department of the second "Xiangtianhua Cup" Poetry Contest.

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