Jia Qianqian is "Zhen Shen Shen"?Comment on Jia Qianqian's "One morning with a good sunshine"

"One morning with good sunshine"

original:

Sunshine

One morning

I lean on the wall

Hold a newspaper

casual

Read the advertisement in the gap

Wall slowly perishine

Soft

Take me a little concave in

Let me sit, rely on, lying down

I smiled satisfaction with satisfaction

Turn your head to discover

Inlaid in the wall

More than me

Lao Zhang next door

There are also cats who do not sleep

Several arranged bird eggs in the bird's nest

Sunshine

One morning

You have no news for a long time

I'm so tired and lazy

【Analysis】

This poem is not long, and the literal meaning is very clear, but do we feel that the intention is endless after reading?

The pretty of this poem is to seamlessly connect the real life scene with the author's inner thinking activities through the writing of consciousness. Metaphorical vocabulary, but to make you like watching a movie Montess, naturally transition to the author's inner world.

In order to facilitate understanding, we divide this poem into three sections:

At the beginning, this poem sets a common life scene: sunny, read newspapers in the morning. "The sun is very good/one morning/I lean on the wall/hold the newspaper/careless/read the advertisement in the gap." The focus of this poem is "indifferent", that is, not really reading newspapers, but to eliminate the time of "good sunshine", otherwise they will not read "advertisements in the gap".

In the second quarter, "The wall slowly moves/becomes softened/brought me a little concave in/allows me to sit, rely on, lying/I can smile/I find/inlaid/inlaid in the wall/more than just more than just/more than just in the wall. I/I have the old Zhang/and the sleeping cat/and the bird's nests in the next door. Here, through the poet's unique tentacles and sensory, the author must be switched from "seams of newspapers" to "wall", but this is a wall that "soft" and "peristaltic" on both sides (this is better than a woman's loneliness. Double?) In this "wall that passs a good time due to boring", not only "Lao Zhang next door" (note that it is not Pharaoh, otherwise it will cause verbal) "Bird Egg", of course, also includes you and me. The word "inlaid" is used here, indicating that everyone is deeply caught.

In the third quarter, "the sun is very good/one morning/you have no news for a long time/I am so tired and lazy." If you don't know much about the second quarter, it will suddenly be cheerful! The author's "so tired and lazy" passing time is because "you have no news for a long time" and the answer is here.

Scoring situation: a little better language, 6 points; rhythm is generally 5 points; the body is generally poor (mainly regardless of section) 4 points; the artistic conception and idea are pretty good, scored 8 points, 7 points, plus the basic score 50 points, 50 points for basic scores , So the overall score is 80 points.

Reador: Reading Sleeping Poetry Society, Township Medicine Poet Hua Ling

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Poet of the sleeping column: Reading the sleeping poet Hua Ling, formerly known as Liang Chenghao, born in 1974, the male Han nationality, native of Wolong District, Nanyang City, Henan Province. Chinese contemporary pioneer poet, emerging writer, is now a local rural doctor. Ben Jun has loved literature since he was a child. At the age of twelve, he wrote the first poem in his life. Since the age of sixteen, he has created and published thousands of literary works. Most of them are poetry. The first collection of poems "Love Songs and Lyment" was successfully published in the Ancient Books Publishing House in Zhongzhou, Henan in April 2015, and won the silver award of the 3rd New Poet Award in Beijing in June of that year. Qingdao's second red sorghum pen will bronze award. The second collection of poems "Beauty Snake" is also planning and publishing. In addition, the author's more influential works include the long -term science fiction love novel "Sirius Love" and the novel "The Certificate of Male", etc., have been published publicly on major literary websites.

Pay attention to sleeping, poetic habitat

Facing the sea, looking for light with black eyes. On November 16, 2015, the Poetry Society of Sleeping Poetry Club, the Poetry Club took the mission of "speaking for grassroots poets" and the purpose of promoting the "spirit of poetry", that is, the pursuit of the truth, kindness and beauty of poetry, the artistic innovation of poetry, and the spirit of poetry. Poetry friends have been published in the collection of poems "The Spring Blossoms of Sleeping Poems" and "The Grass Ying Ying Flying on Sleeping Poems".

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